The opening for this is the most important part, and you cut it. It's him, just laying there, on a sunny day with the cicadas buzzing.
The visual is supposed to be a direct reaction to this, as a hallucination, a day dream of that which has ruined him. As it escalates, the brighter trappings give way to the actual darker meaning of his trapped soul, his sex obsession with non-real entities.
You subtracted the reality from this video, and left only the lotus lie.