>>52584044>Having been betrayed once in her youth, Franze is naturally suspicious of others. It's come to the point of neurosis in some instances, but she would never open the inner workings of her mind to anyone other than her closest companions. Again, same as last app you're telling me stuff about her that should be private. Tell us what she's like interacting with people, the DM doesn't give a shit if your character is secretly a sociopath, if deep down she's a huge piece of shit it doesn't matter because she has to adventure and do stuff.
So tell us how we can expect her to get along in a party,
"She's invested most of her life to the law, and she's proud of this, and what she does"
An entire sentence to say she's proud.
"Diplomacy, and intimidation, are both tools to be used by her to achieve results, as the situation dictates, as long as it draws closer to her desired outcome."
Whole sentence to say she uses her brain at a functional level.
"Along the same line of thinking, Franze is, of course, willing to step on whoever gets in her way, so long as they can't benefit her. Whether she's whispering into a man's ear about a woman she finds particularly suitable for him, or having a watch member kept at their current, lowly rank because their ideals aren't in line with her own."
Now I don't know if the DM loves all this useless fluff, but here's what I got,
"She's slow to trust, if at all, proud, pragmatic and manipulative."
So again my personal length biases are showing, but consider how much you're actually saying here and how much it's taking you to say it.
Overall I think this is an okay app, lots of details is better than too few even if they're fluffed up, and I like older PC's.
My main concern is the ability for a PC to work with a group, especially if they're anti-social so I might consider how the lawful aspect would be useful to tier her into a party, that is something I'd like expanded on.
